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Then one lovely lady, Becca Weston over at Peculiar Light, came up with a brilliant idea. Instead of crafting in our writing cave black holes creating sub-par pitches, let's get together and really dazzle these agents with our sheer genius. Becca opened her blog to us as a place to post our pitches and get helpful suggestions from everyone else.
Is it strange to give advice to people you'll be competing against in just a few days? Maybe. Is it magical to be part of such a supportive community that encourages growth and sincerely roots for the success of others? Absolutely!
And just because I know you're dying to know, here's the current draft of my pitch. Feel free to add your own suggestions. :)
16 year old mind reader, Stacie, could spy on her hot neighbor, but fighting the forces of evil is probably a better use of her time. #WVTP
Ooh, I'm wondering what those evil forces are.
ReplyDeleteI love it. How fun...I played a bit with your 140 characters and came up with this slight revision....16 yo mind reader, Stacie, could spy on her hot neighbor, but fighting the forces of evil is probably a better use of her new power. #WVTP
ReplyDeleteBTW, emailing you is on my to-do list today! ;o)
Hi, Sara! Thanks for the shout-out. :) Glad you're liking the pitch crit session over there! I'm hoping to get back into the comments over the next couple of days - I've been fussing with a partial that I need to send out, trying to get it to shine.
ReplyDeleteCouple quick notes since I'm here: Definitely, like Christi has, shorten 16 year old to 16 y/o and save those characters. I'd also say you can cut the commas around Stacie's name to save those, too. If there's a way to be more specific than "forces of evil," that might be a good tweak as well.